Friday Fictioneers – 12 December 2014

It’s Friday Fictioneers time and it’s good to have time this week to play. Check out the blog run admirably by Rochelle Wiseoff-Field to learn all you need to know about Friday Fictioneers. From there you can link to the other stories inspired by the following photo.

Copyright - Sandra Crook

Copyright – Sandra Crook

Sticks and Stones

I’m not allowed to tell you why we moved out here. Or use my real name. Mum says, no way would she be hiding in this hell hole if she had a choice.

It’s not that bad.

There are more cows than people but the cattle dog next door follows me down to the waterhole for a swim most days. The creek’s banks are clogged with sticks and stones. I have to pick my way over them so my feet don’t get ripped to pieces. I don’t worry about that much. It’s names that could hurt us.

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28 Responses to Friday Fictioneers – 12 December 2014

  1. A lovely unique take on the nursery rhyme Karen. Great to see your story up here this week!

  2. Sandra says:

    Glad to see you back, and with a thoughtful take on the prompt. Well done.

  3. Dear Karen,

    A clever twist on the old “sticks and stones will break my bones”…Well thought out…and the truth is that names and words can leave deeper scars that sticks and stones.

    Good to see you back.



    • That’s exactly right, Rochelle. As a child I always remember being skeptical when people said that chant. Words can be incredibly powerful and hurtful. Thanks for commenting. It’s good to be part of FF again.

  4. dmmacilroy says:

    Dear Karen,

    As smooth as your story is, it doesn’t show the effort that went into working the play on the the nursery rhyme into its fabric. Very well imagined and executed.



  5. plaridel says:

    sad story. hopefully, it’s only a temporary situation and they’d be able to move to a better place.

  6. Jan Brown says:

    A unique interpretation of the prompt, and a well told story.

  7. Yes — there are those cases..hiding for whatever reasons.. to be a child in places like that.. at least she knows what the dangers are.

  8. dianathrelfo says:

    I’m often blown away by the workings of writer’s minds and your take on the prompt has done it again, Karen. To come up with such a unique take on the prompt demonstrates wonderful creativity and insightfulness.

  9. Karen, this just jumps at me, as the opening of a novel… there’s a lot more here, but this 100 words has totally captivated me! Fantastic!

  10. storydivamg says:

    Dear Karen,
    I like the twist on ‘words could never hurt me.’

    All my best,
    Marie Gail

  11. Margaret says:

    I like how the child’s response is so different to the parent’s. It sounds like an adventure for him, as it would. Very skilful interweaving of their different experiences of their situation, and the play on the idea of being hurt by a name is great. Lovely.

  12. Karen, Welcome back. Good, well-written story as always. Creative way to use the old nursery rhyme. 🙂 — Susan

  13. Maree Gallop says:

    Brilliant story Karen! The last line is so evocative and haunting.

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