Friday Fictioneers – March 21

Every Friday writers from around the world contribute 100 word stories prompted by a photograph supplied by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields to Friday Fictioneers. Everyone is welcome to contribute and we love comments on our stories.

Copyright - Rochelle Wisoff-Fields

Copyright – Rochelle Wisoff-Fields

Letters from Abroad

My sister’s letters home to Australia said nothing of a condemned building, a clapped out elevator, paint peeling walls and six flights of stairs reeking of urine.

Instead her letters told of a penthouse with views of the Seine, the breakthrough singing role, the riotous applause of her debut.

Gran constantly asked her for a programme. Mum begged for publicity shots of her Opera Star Daughter to wave like Dior perfume under the nose of her customers. I’m expected to bring back these sacred artefacts they have never received.

No doubt my sister will be very surprised to see me.

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56 Responses to Friday Fictioneers – March 21

  1. All that deception about to be revealed! I love how this piece sets up for a climax just about to happen…

  2. True for so many emigrants, whether for selfish reasons or to protect families at home who are worried. Good read.

  3. Great story Karen, I loved the expectation of the sister opening the door to see her visitor. Very well done.

  4. You are good Karen, really good. I enjoyed it so much. 🙂

  5. subroto says:

    This is such a great story. Ah the tangled web we weave…..

  6. storydivamg says:

    Karen,
    Good story this week. Yes, she’ll be surprised, but I have a feeling she could use a visitor right now.

    All my best,
    MG

  7. Another GREAT story, Karen! What a wicked web we weave, when we practice to deceive… right? The desire to appear independent and successful trumps the truth. I’m with MG, sounds like she needs some love and support!

  8. K.Z. says:

    fantastic story, Karen. i can understand why someone would choose to make up stories instead of telling everyone back home about her shattered dreams. I’m glad though that her sister came for a visit. looks like she could use some help…

  9. Carrie says:

    Sister’s always know 🙂

    • Thanks for seeing that, Carrie. I tried to suggest that the sister felt there was something wrong which is why she made the surprise visit. But the 100 words limit defeated me.

  10. R. E. Hunter says:

    Ooh, busted. Good one.

  11. plaridel says:

    obviously, she doesn’t want the folks at home to worry. it’s nice of her to be discreet about her situation. i think the visitor should respect that as well.

    • I’m glad you saw that she didn’t want to worry her family, Plaridel. If the visiting sister thinks she is in any kind of danger I hope she will do whatever she can, even reveal the true circumstances, in order to help her.

  12. Maree says:

    Great story Karen, that hints at so much more going on in a background story. I love your sentence about … waving Dior perfume under the nose of customers… just beautiful.

  13. Karen, I think if someone wasn’t making it the way they’d hoped to they might do this so that no one they loved would be disappointed. How sad. Nicely done. Your descriptions were so good.

    janet

  14. Sandra says:

    So many layers to this story. Made me wonder about the visiting sister too, not to mention the back story to the other sister. Well done Karen.

  15. Dear Karen,

    I’ll add my comment to the ones already spoken. One of the best I’ve read. You’ve packed a complete novel into a hundred words. Perhaps the sister will welcome the chance to stop living a lie.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

  16. atrm61 says:

    Absolutely mind-blowing tale Karen!The web of lies we weave -the masks we wear-the pretense-heartbreaking yet sometimes it is the only thing that helps one cling on to life,to shattered hopes and the thing called life!Hopefully,her sister’s arrival will bring some relief-at least she won’t have to pretend with her.Love the depth in this 🙂

  17. shonasim says:

    Another great piece, Karen!

  18. Oops! You are going to be the whistle-blower. Simply and superbly done!

  19. DCTdesigns says:

    Karen. Fabulous story. I love how you wove it towards the surprise greeting. I can already see her sister’s reaction. This gig is up. She is so busted!

    • Thanks, DCT. I can see her sister’s face, too. I didn’t have enough words to show the meeting, and I hoped I’d written the story in such a way the reader could see what would happen. I’m thrilled you have.

  20. wmqcolby says:

    Surprised? She’ll go out of her mind! Suffering for the art or the lie. Super story. Rich in everything.

  21. Oh, poor thing. But she’ll be happy to share her situation with her sister once she’s over the shock. I hope she’s happy despite the squalor. Bohemian lifestyle is okay.

  22. Great story. I bet the visiting sister joins in the deception to protect the parents. ;>

  23. So many times this is the end to a deceptive story… maybe iẗ́s good when it comes out in the light.

  24. Amy Reese says:

    Good read, Karen. This is quite realistic and this looks to be just the place you don’t want to ever end up in. Great take.

  25. Good story with good description that places us on the scene. I think we know how this will turn out. Hopefully, well for both.

  26. Nan Falkner says:

    Good story Karen. I bet her sister is going to be so surprised. Very well written I almost feel sorry for the sister who has been exaggerating the truth. What happens next? Love it. Nan 🙂

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